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== Hamishwillee - Thanks ==
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Hi Olivier
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Looks like this has improved a lot. I've just subedited the introduction to improve readability and layout (a little). Won't touch the rest until you let me know it is ready.
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Hamish<p style="text-align:right">[[User:Hamishwillee|&#60;br /&#62;----]] ([[User talk:Hamishwillee|talk]]) 07:25, 3 October 2013 (EEST)</p>

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Hamishwillee - Very cool Olivier

Hi Olivier

Thanks very much for contributing - this is extremely cool!

I see that it is still in draft. When you're ready can you please remove that category so that I know that you're ready for it to be reviewed.

The subediting changes I would make would be mostly those in Help:Wiki Article Review Checklist

  • Remove the "8" in the title - we use Categories to indicate the platform version and only specify in title if the article will only apply to that version (ie for Bing Maps article that is only for WP7 then the "7" makes sense)
  • Use the standard styles - bold for filenames, Icode for inline code
  • Update the introduction to say more about what the article explains and covers. I'd probably reproduce your screenshots here too
  • Wiki style is dry - covers what works more than how you found out about it (so its not like a blog or a story). For example readers generally don't care that " Finally I found a message on a forum from a developer of the API etc" - the only reason to mention another developer is if you're explicitly acknowledging their contribution.
  • Minor restructure.

I'll be away next week, so any changes would be after that. Of course it is your article, so feel free to modify or update in the meantime.

Regards

Hamish

hamishwillee (talk) 07:54, 20 September 2013 (EEST)

Hamishwillee - Thanks

Hi Olivier

Looks like this has improved a lot. I've just subedited the introduction to improve readability and layout (a little). Won't touch the rest until you let me know it is ready.

Regards

Hamish

hamishwillee (talk) 07:25, 3 October 2013 (EEST)